In a message dated 07.14.03 10:04:49 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< I jump the threshold,
seek help for the planet -
mortgaged
to a moon, stars, and a sun. >>
I like these lines very much. I agree on twilight zone. I find avoidance of
gerund to make some of your construction awkwards such as, where relax body,
mind, and soul.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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