Ryfkah, thanks, glad you enjoyed it.
James, thanks for the read and comments. I take your point about 'ing' but
there are not that many in the piece.
Sue, thanks for the kind response. This is based on my earlier days when I
did a bit of cave exploration. These were not walk in caves though more
holes in the ground carved in the limestone by underground streams but they
could and did lead on to splendid caverns. Your concern for caves resembling
graves is valid and an element in ths piece of work. As is the resemblence
to the womb. Both are signposted in the piece. Our moorland uplands are home
to barrows whose narrow exit was deliberately so, it is conjectured, to
resemble the womb exit and accomodate rebirth. Rebirth is hinted at in the
dead sealife that was changed into hard rock now being dissolved and
reshaped by the acidic rainfall and streams.
John ( or is it Sandri?) this form is a haibun. A prose piece generally
about a journey which terminates with a haiku. It is allowed to intersperse
haiku where the writer fels it relevant to do so. My haiku are not strictly
so, but I am exploring the form and allow myself latitude. It is interesting
and challenging to marry prose and poetry. Indeed it is not always easy for
me to see them as separate forms. You were right to see death as the
undertheme of the piece as is the idea of rebirth, in some form or another.
Gary, thanks . Are you trying any of this form?? I know you did some ghazal
and haiku, just wondered if you had broached this one.
Again thank you all for your read, kind respnse and time taken to
communicate it. Regards Arthur.