Bob,
The poem brings out loneliness nicely.
The comments are for minor correction.
Further to comments by Sally...
It appears that the person is sitting in a room;
then "people nudge past him" is difficult to explain.
If the person is in the open then
"sways towards the door" ?
> > as people nudge past him, he stops
...
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> > stands, sways towards the door,
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