I really like the idea in the ending. Howabout tidying up the first line to
He sits reading last Thursday's paper? I'm not ooure about thepick-ups of
he's sat...he's talking. the more direct narrative works better for me.
a good vignette
bw
SallyE
on 12/7/03 6:35 pm, Bob Cooper at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> One for yr C & C:
>
> Each morning this week on The Circular
>
> He’s sat reading a paper, always last Thursdays,
> at arm’s length, squinting,
> turning pages loudly, then,
> as people nudge past him, he stops
> at a half-page photograph –
> the black and white face as expressionless,
> as grey as his own. Each trembles
> yet neither moves – until he folds it,
> stands, sways towards the door,
> gets off at the hospital then stands there
> and he’s talking, sub headings
> to a story no-one would print.
>
>
> Bob Cooper
>
>
> Oh, I hope y can work it out, The Circular is a Bus!
>
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