Morning Shah. This is not one of your better pieces. The form is slack, the
syntax so nebulous that the meaning is dispersed. It reads almost like a
sketch for a poem. It needs a rethink and a rewrite I think. Regards Arthur.
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From: "c s shah" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Wednesday, July 09, 2003 2:15 AM
Subject: The Reason
> Release me
> not because you lack evidence;
> I've not committed any crime.
> No mercy,
> freedom - out of strength,
> for I was never guilty.
> Otherwise
> the burden
> the linger
> the humiliation
> this life
> mine, yours
> and hers
> a surrender
> a subjugation
> a trial
> out of weakness.
> --
>
> c s shah
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