Thanks Shah,
same-same seems to have hit a wall on this list, though getting a little
praise on another - tricky stuff.
Thanks for your other comments, also - I can see what you mean and will
review.
Cheers,
Frank
> > difference and same-same ("same-same" - sounds odd)
> > a crowd of sensory impressions to sift ("sensory impressions" - too
> technical in otherwise 'simple outlay')
>
> > this town was like that for me (- very effective statement)
>
> > nose to curb
> > in the main street ( - not clear)
>
> > or standing in a crowd
> > of two
> > in the middle of the footpath
> > blocking traffic ( - very apt)
>
> > prams bearing pensive chocolate faces (- a bit cliched)
>
> > and always an eye on the weather (instead of "and always" - and with...)
>
> I guess... this is a good poem.
>
> c s shah
>
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