Hi Sue,
I'm going to go against my natural tendencies and suggest that the formality
of 'cannot' doesn't work for me (3 occurrences I think). In each case, I
suspect the piece would flow a little easier with the abbreviation (as I
say, against my usual tendencies LOL).
Cheers,
frank
----- Original Message -----
From: "Sue Scalf" <[log in to unmask]>
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Sent: Saturday, July 05, 2003 10:42 AM
Subject: Re: Replete (revised)
> Bitter Wine
>
>
> There may be
> a million metaphors:
> a place in the sky
> where there was a star
> or just a tree gone
> and wind blowing
> where no branches are,
> a voice I cannot hear,
> an empty hand.
>
> I know six pairs of shoes
> fitted to his feet,
> the memory of steps--
> clinics, long halls--
> a walking cane that leans,
> a pillow for his head,
> the joke, the belly laugh,
> everything that masks
> what I cannot tell.
> Communion wafers are thin
> as moonlight;
> wine galls the tongue.
>
> Take this cup
> and spill dark seeds
> of blood upon the ground.
> Having drunk my fill,
> I cannot begin again.
>
> Sue Scalf
>
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