Hi Christina,
Yes, excellent poem here. Love the idea and imagery, fairly sensuous to a
bloke somehow, maybe its just me being a little pervy. However, I thought
the last line left the poem just that bit flat and in need of a stronger
finish.
bw
James
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: The Height of a Hem
>Date: Wed, 25 Jun 2003 14:01:21 EDT
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> The Height of a Hem
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> How much larger than life you seemed.
> I longed to please and be good,
> feeling small and plain and useless.
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> Some days I find an unmarred memory
> stitched in the height of a hem
> worn until the cloth shone and seams split:
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> I'm standing on a chair, turning.
> You're bending, pearl-headed pins
> in your teeth, sewing
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> until you unfold and I
> step down and we say:
> 'Just right now'.
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> christina fletcher
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