Hi Ryfkah,
This is great. I love the composite words, though only stopped for a second 
to wonder at their purpose, perhaps the rapid passage of time. Just one 
little bit in s1 where "stands silent" follows on to "love" where I felt 
there was not a smooth line change and felt it needed breaking up some way 
to make sense.



bw
James





>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New:  Blind
>Date: Fri, 27 Jun 2003 11:16:08 EDT
>
>In his tale "The Seven Beggars," Rebbe Nachman tells of a groom and bride 
>who
>were rejoicing at their wedding when a blind beggar spoke up, saying,
>"I am giving you a wedding gift that you should be old as I am...You think
>that I am blind, but in truth, I am not blind at all.  Just to me, all the
>world's existence is not even like the blink of an eye" (Rabbi Nachman’s 
>Stories,
>p. 363364).
>
>
>Blind
>
>pile of bones   illusion's fire
>
>you blink back your lament
>a dam that will not retain
>time like Joshua's sun stands silent
>love that was to flourish ceaseless
>now a runaway in the streets
>
>starvedillkemptneedy
>
>the shofar sounds   warns
>exclaims  from hill to hill
>you wake up from blindness
>
>angerresentmenthurt
>
>buried in ancient ruins
>light like new love seeps
>through your eyes   Illusion
>delusion creep away   still
>as a predator leaving his prey
>
>pile of bones       enlightened fire
>
>Ryfkah 6/26/03

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