"if it a freak memory" doesn't quite make grammatical sense. Is this the
intention as the poem goes on as it seems to start to lose focus from a
really strong beginning, and on a subject that is not often tackled that I
know of. A really interesting piece that just needs honing towards the end.
Surely you don't consider some of your poems to be minor Gary. How do you
decide?
bw
James
Thanks for the grammar call, James. The bit does need work at the end and
more than the gun.
Minor? How do I decide? Some written only for fun, as exercises, simply to
be writing. They tend to know themselves.
Gary
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