"if it a freak memory" doesn't quite make grammatical sense. Is this the 
intention as the poem goes on as it seems to start to lose focus from a 
really strong beginning, and on a subject that is not often tackled that I 
know of. A really interesting piece that just needs honing towards the end. 
Surely you don't consider some of your poems to be minor Gary. How do you 
decide?



bw
James





>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: An Early Morning after Sixty
>Date: Sun, 22 Jun 2003 10:12:14 -0700
>
>An Early Morning after Sixty
>
>
>
>This morning,
>
>I entered my body
>
>and knew it.
>
>
>
>The night's piss had not quite
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>risen to the point of discomfort,
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>those the minutes I fight waking,
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>not ready to rise and face the day.
>
>
>
>like a smooth plastic rod
>
>dropped into a well machined slot
>
>as if perfectly engineered
>
>white,  perhaps colorless
>
>through the top of my head
>
>
>
>I was surprised
>
>but not so much I, startled,
>
>leaped from bed in shock.
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>I knew it must have occurred before,
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>unnoticed among whatever passes
>
>for my first morning thoughts.
>
>
>
>I went about my morning routine -
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>coffee,
>
>a weather check,
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>paper,
>
>email,
>
>small revisions to minor poems -
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>the event a nag
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>until between washing floors and laundry,
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>it pushed aside my other thoughts.
>
>
>
>Think of a day
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>when you did something slightly unusual,
>
>and how you reacted as time drug you
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>further and further away
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>from the almost unique
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>until you could no longer be sure
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>if it a freak of memory,
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>a dream,
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>or as real as the first time
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>you touched her naked.
>
>
>
>And finally,
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>you'd rambled enough
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>to remember why there is no gun in the house.
>
>
>
>just visiting?
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