Hi Bob,
A powerful read this one. Could I suggest that you call it "BurningThe Ford
Fiesta" then you wouldn't need to explain to others around the world.
Another thought is the slight dampening in effect from the proliferation in
gerunds that could easily be removed. I've tried it below if you don't mide
the intrusion on your work.
bw
James
>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Burning The Fiesta
>Date: Sat, 21 Jun 2003 15:11:22 +0000
>
>A "Fiesta" is the name of a small Ford car sold in the UK.
>For C & C:
>
>Burning The Fiesta
>
>They clamber out, high-five it and shout,
>one still waves the screwdriver used to open it,
>before they’d hotwired it, revved it until it howled
>and now they dance, turn to kick it
>then set it alight. Their wild eyes calm
>as flames fill the inside, the heat forced out
>almost embrace them. Such satisfaction,
>the handbrake turns, quick lefts, fast rights,
>the risk and trust to end up where they always arrive
>beside the other wrecks - yesterdays, last weeks -
>and now beneath the black smoke they stand
>like prisoners outside the gate, released.
>
>Bob Cooper
>
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