Brilliant idea, to change roundthe stanzasm because you begin in
generalities and then give more specific ideas. it would be better the
other way I agree.
bw
SallyE
on 22/6/03 5:12 pm, Ryfkah * at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> How about flip-flopping the two stanzas?
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> I viscerally get this poem but not cerebrally.
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> kol tuv, Ryfkah
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