Sue, I liked the end at chains, but if this version the first read who
knows. Here
gently make the rockers squeak upon the porch
or move the swing with its rusty chains.
With winter's first rain, they are still there,
settled with an aching cold that chills the veins.
perhaps a S break at With winter's
or perhaps cut from with to falls and keep the last S, which means I'm no
help.
Thanks.
Gary
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