CS, a bit prosey to me. Here:
With "salbutamol", steroids, and steam,
I kept the "nebulizer" ready for the night,
these asthma attacks are adamant at times.
I would drop the "" and think there is a change in tense at are. Please
consider doing it all in present tense.
Cut are above and was in the last line.
Gary
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