Hi James,
I like this, too! You can handle a short line well.
How would this work with some punctuation? (maybe somewhere between "better"
and "the same," I guess...)
Bob
>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New Sub: A Word
>Date: Fri, 20 Jun 2003 15:29:02 +0000
>
>a word
>
>
>we met at the
>bp chemical plant
>with vast vats
>that contained
>liquids that
>he said
>was delaquiscent
>
>what a word
>delaquiscent
>
>so eloquent
>for a place with
>pipes like endless
>snakes with stinking
>steam and tanks
>of arcane fluid
>that were
>of course
>delaquescent
>
>that was
>a longtimeago
>in a place so
>technical
>it was wordles
>except for
>this one
>that
>came from his lips
>with respect
>with awe
>or was it just
>the one that
> functioned
>best
>for its sound
>its multi-syllabic
>sweep
>that was inclusive
>enough to include
>what was needed
>from a suction
> machine
>
>now there's a word -
>suction
>
>
>
>bw
>James
>
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