Grassy, a bit of bother in part of the work:
You briefcased it. Alas,Donne's sonnet crossed
"You briefcased it." does not work for me. Maybe is it a cousin's way of
speech, unknown by those of us on this side of the pond. Regardless, it
took me from the poem.
a page, and at the funeral, you rushed
the octave, closed the book, pi-faced - so cruel
to leave that sweet sestet unvoiced. I crushed
the urge to cry out 'Finish it, you fool!'
Perhaps borrow from the above for a title: A Fool at the Funeral ?
Thanks.
Gary
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