Thanks Sue, this one needs a reworking and this is a great help.


bw
James





>From: Sue Scalf <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: As Winter Breaks Into Spring
>Date: Sun, 15 Jun 2003 13:33:04 EDT
>
>In a message dated 06/14/2003 8:40:46 AM Central Daylight Time,
>[log in to unmask] writes:
>
><< AS WINTER BREAKS INTO SPRING
>
>  There will come a time when
>  I will not return to this river
>  and engage in the role of supplicant,   cut -- not needed
>  as familiarity can breed the less   too much of a cliche here
>  than ordinary - this could be a
>  carlessness on my part as I am   What could be carelessness and why say
>on
>my part?
>  pulled in one direction or another
>  in answer to the vagaries of the heart   by would be enough
>  as winter bursts into spring.
>
>  Look again, see and feel
>  the booted heel that denies
>  a start to healing thought
>  contained within those daily
>  meditations that do not sink
>  creation in the shallows of life.   I don't know what you mean here.
>
>   >>
>Hope these tweaks help.  Sue

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