Hi Frank,
Great rhythm here! Fine stanzas and stanza breaks, and chorus! And, again,
I'm delighted/amazed by the way the ending works. If I were into strictly
ballroom and had those little square cards to show this would score 6 - 6 -
6 - 6!
Bob
>From: Frank Faust <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: sub - sometimes it's dancing - old fashioned tap
>Date: Tue, 10 Jun 2003 09:32:25 +1000
>
> Another from the 'Emile's' series.
>
>The female character has been demanded and is emerging (in her own way).
>I'm looking for a word other than 'partner' and haven't found it. It
>represents a problem, rather than a person.
>
>C&C most welcome (with some trepidation).
>
>Cheers,
>
>Frank
>sometimes it's dancing - old fashioned tap
>
>start your feet moving
>
>rat-a-tat-tat
>set your arms in motion
>make it light speed and dazzle
>
>rat-a-tap-tapping
>
>CLAP
>
>shuffle around your partner
>don't break the rhythm
>backwards is a special
>
>
>CLAP
>
>start another pattern
>ratchet up to blinding
>never stop smiling
>
>CLAP
>
>shimmy like the devil
>hold eye contact
>keep on smiling
>
>CLAP
>
>use the light to sparkle
>
>CLAP
>
>slip behind the curtain
>
>CLap
>
>don't forget your roses
>
>clap
>
>keep on dancing
>
>clap
>
>~
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