Poignant and powerful.
Take a look at the last stanza. I rearranged it because I think the punch could be made to have more wham . . . Just a thought . . .
Scott
a world with no clear rim,
a blend of colors and quietness.
these voiceless mornings
that go on like a dream
I wouldn't want to live there,
without you
but I do
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