I've one or two
little nits I'll put in CAPs as and when. (CAPS makes them see far LOUDER
than I'm trying to type them, though! Grin!!)
Bob, thanks for the suggestions. Re the Stop and go, I do want the
repeating. The circumstances is more difficult, but for know I wish to keep
it. I see him there because he can not leave - job, funds or maybe
relationships. Is he her creation and she his or?
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I loved the sentence "He's
tethered to the city by circumstance."...maybe because I could relate to it
so
completely..don't know. But I'd hate for you to leave that sentence out.
As you know, Bob and I do agree on the title.
Barbara
Barbara, it stays. Thanks. I'm still considering better titles.
Gary
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