Yes, it needs to be part of a larger piece as it doesn't quite stand alone
for me. I'm not quite sure why which is not very helpful. Look forward to
seeing others in the proposed set.
bw
James
>From: Christina Fletcher <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Amigos (first draft)
>Date: Sun, 1 Jun 2003 05:34:26 EDT
>
>It's so quiet I thought I'd post this though I won't be at the computer
>after
>today until the end of the week so please forgive a slow response to any
>comments or suggestions. The dedication probably won't be in the final
>version
>since I hope it'll be one of a set.
>bw
>christina
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> Amigos
> (for my mother)
>
> Here we are, the only record: blonde and brown,
> a moustachioed Canary Island smiler
> flexing his pecs to your right, feathery palms sprouting
> like wild hats over our heads. 'Pull your hair back, girl.' -
> for once, I've two eyes, an almost smile. You're wearing
> that full-happiness face you always showed the camera
> though you'd cracked your skull on the bar of the jeep.
> That was the day we saw macaws fly free in the parrot park,
> thousands of birds, flitting through orchids: masked
> and Madagascar love birds, rainbow lorikeets
> that perched on shoulders to nibble lobes.
> It was the day of the night we hit Amigos and the waiter
> thought we were sisters and
> served single roses with paella.
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> christina fletcher
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