Hi Grassy,
Yes, liked this. I think you don't need to intrude and tell use "life was so
simple then" as it lessens the impact of the poem and adds a little bathos I
don't think you need. I like the crow at the end. I presume it's there
because a crow on a roof top is believed, or was believed to signify a
coming death in that household. I could be wrong though.
bw
James
>From: grasshopper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Sasha's Mug
>Date: Mon, 2 Jun 2003 05:26:42 +0100
>
> Sasha's Mug
>
>
>Sasha had a special mug with a fault
>in the firing, which sang when it was filled.
>It cheered us all up, that high fluting note
>from the shiny caramel china.
>I remember sitting with her, earnestly discussing
>the Wife of Bath,or Donne's Devotions,
>while Welsh Mary's bed thumped against the wall
>next door because her boyfriend was visiting.
>'Not much to look at, but his family is loaded'
>she shrugged.
> Those regular bangs and the sound
>of Sashas mug, occasional calls down the corridor
>for carbon paper or the cheese-thief's name,
>a glug of kettle-fill from the communal kitchen.
>Life was so simple then. The flaws in the glaze
>resolved into song. There were always blackbirds
>outside the window, never crows.
>
> grasshopper
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