Hi David,
Good to see you back!
I've a couple of questions...
The first is about the title: I'm wondering if the title is working hard
enough. It's describing what the poem is describing -- but I'm wondering if
it could give more information, give a context...
and, secondly, could the first two stanzas be swopped round? How would that
change things for your reading/grasp of how the poem's working?
Bob
>From: "D.C Bursey" <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Bleed out
>Date: Mon, 2 Jun 2003 02:48:03 -0230
>
>colours
>drenched in gardens
>filled with life
>
>a fire-red sunset
>turns brown with
>time and light
>
>pigment and blood
>paint on canvas
>condensed from memories
>
>contradictions
>perceptions of beauty as
>both painting and artist fade
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