Thanks for your valuable comments here Bob. The missing letter is "t" to
make "to". I do these so quickly. I like your suggestions on title and
ending and thinkl I will take them up. The present title came from a need
simply to have one.



bw
James





>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New Sub: Homo Sapien Looks At His Home World
>Date: Mon, 26 May 2003 17:50:00 +0000
>
>Hi James,
>Interesting...
>I'm not sure about the "o" at the start of line 4, is it a typo?
>Just another thought: How's about using the last line as the title - and
>ending the poem with the word "inside"?
>Another one for the sequence, the widening estuary collection!
>Bob
>
>
>>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: New Sub: Homo Sapien Looks At His Home World
>>Date: Sat, 24 May 2003 10:36:20 +0000
>>
>>OK it comes in the guise of a river poem too.
>>
>>HOMO SAPIEN LOOKS AT HIS HOME WORLD
>>
>>You know you are on your own
>>when all there is
>>is you and a small wader bird
>>o which it's difficult to put a name
>>doing an inherited dance on the waterline
>>where the water glitters
>>like precious stones in the sun
>>as tide and wind force
>>make it lick the shore -
>>the liquid is visceral and alive
>>enough to look like it
>>might gently and quietly
>>draw the bird inside.
>>
>>Life is different from an obtuse angle.
>>
>>
>>
>>bw
>>James
>>
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