Hello Bob,
          Thanks for your comments. I´ll give your suggestion some thought, it could work out as another one of those, `Once upon a time there was this collection of relics....´ type fantasies. let´s see.


Best wishes,   Mike




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Hi Mike,
I'm wondering if this would grip the reader more if you put the collection 
of relics actually/literally on a train - and then we could glimpse them 
alongside you, and wonder where they're going too. The surrealness of 
glimpsing them through train windows as the train pauses at, or trundles 
through, the station is surreally interesting, memorable. That way we don't 
share your thoughts, we discover our own thoughts through your suggestions 
and directions.
Bob


>From: Mike Horwood <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Antiquities
>Date: Tue, 20 May 2003 17:53:40 +0300
>
>Antiquities
>
>
>It´s so easy to think that this collection
>of relics from the past - Roman coins,
>rococo china, silver snuff box
>and nineteenth century prints -
>has arrived at its own destination
>here in our present, like time travellers
>that have materialised
>out of the mists of antiquity.
>Easy to believe that reality
>is conferred on them by our eyes.
>
>In fact, our present is just a railway station
>these objects are rushing through
>and our faces, half glimpsed on the platform,
>will soon be history, as the Roman coins,
>rococo china, silver snuff box
>and nineteenth century prints
>disembark in some other future.
>
>
>
>Mike
>
>
>

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