Thanks for the input.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
In a message dated 05.26.03 4:34:52 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< Hi Ryfkah,
Great poem IMHO! (And there ought to be many more poems about Billie
Holliday!)
I love the sax sound and the ear! Yeh! That's how it is!
I find, tho, I sometimes wonder a little if it's her man who's wearing the
silk stockings! "real silk stockings of her man..." (It's an unlikely
interpretation of the lines - but it's possible!). Could commas help?
And the word "meld" sounds so unlike Lady Day's way of saying things, it
really seems to stand out in the poem - it's a rare word among ordinary
words. I guess a different word would alter the meaning quite a lot: melt is
a word I've considered (which seems to have cruel connotations because I
associate it with the horrors of explosions as well as the slinkiness of the
poem!), and "merge" and "blend" don't seem strong enough. Ha! I guess I may
just be pointing out my problems with the word.
Bob >>
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