Thanks, David, I'm taking your steer on L.2 and giving 'uncomplicated' more
thought. Philip.
>From: Brigid Anthony <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: new submission: THE SIGHT OF AUTUMN (second draft)
>Date: Thu, 2 Jan 2003 17:37:29 -0500
>
>This is a great improvement.
>Suggest you replace the full stop in L2 with a hyphen, then small-case"
>you" following.
>In L16, perhaps:
>"by autumn leaves, although I find"?
>I don't share Sally E's view of "uncomplicated": the rhyme depends on
>forced stress and mispronunciation, and I think the word should go.
>Regards,
>David
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