Hi Arthur,
Lots to enjoy here. I'm interested in the use of the words "blither" and
"laving". Not sure what they mean but enjoyed the sound and usage. I
wondered if there were echoes of Gerard Manley Hopkins although this is
prose poetry in form. I wondered too if it would be better as haibun with
each section having a concluding line of haiku. All said I liked it a lot.
You semed to have taken on a burst and developed another stage.
bw
James
>From: arthur seeley <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: New sub: Beyond a why
>Date: Wed, 14 May 2003 09:01:46 +0100
>
> Beyond a why.
>
>Beyond a why more distant than a hope before a love far sooner than forget
>shook starlight from the flare of doves and poetry from the rack and shock
>of words there was a memory more close than breath of a life far blither
>than perhaps that found succour in the soft obliterations of the snow and
>silence in the slender passage of an hour.
>After a maybe more sudden than a death a wish more subtle than despite knew
>wisdom in the admonitions of the clock and splendour in the terrors of the
>night far better this sometime than those nevers of despair rather an ocean
>than an age and so do not bend to hear the gloomy chuggings of the heart
>but
>fill the days with all the laving jubilations of the light.
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