Hello Gary,
Thanks for your comments. It´s true that the whole poem is rather impersonal and I believe that I imagined it that way, but I´ll give some consideration to your suggestion for a more personal element.
Best wishes, Mike
--- Alkuperäinen viesti ---
A broad indigo stripe appears,
like a bruise on an emerald.
Mike, a great image, but overall I want something more - something personal
to finish it off.
Thanks.
Gary
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