What I would suggest it that a term like antiseptic air is not really true
except perhaps in a hospital setting. So the adjective does not work. Air
that is sharply clean and cold would work,
or air so sharply clean and cold it is wine against the teeth, or air heady
in its purity, but antiseptic? It won't hold. At least not for me. Enjoyed
your viewpoint, Mike. In poetry we try to combine both connotation and
denotation so that each word carries its own weight and yet involves layers
of meaning. That is the form of the richness. And when it is really good,
the reader says "Yes, yes, that is true." Sue
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