I find this reads very "telly", and gives me more the impression of an
impression waiting to be developed into a poem than a poem. The lowest
ebbs here are the premise, largely without mooring, in S1, and the first
line of S5. Also, sometimes in the movies the escape boat lacks keys,
etc., leaving us with a further doubt about the premise. Yet another
problem with the premise is that it elevates Hollywood to a kind of
touchstone: who needs to guide their life based on a certain class of
films?
Carl
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NOT ALWAYS
In Hollywood films you always find
the hero and heroine are able to grab
an escape boat when they want one -
whenever they run towards water
it's always high tide and
a loosely moored motor boat is there
with keys in the ignition
They'd have trouble here - today
is low tide, they'd have to trudge
through ankle deep mud in tuxedo
and long, low cut evening gown
losing patent leathers and high heels -
They would find most boats
stil had winter tarpaulins roped
over cabin and deck - or something
rotting and completely knackered,
without fuel, in need of more
than a coat of marine paint before
being made fully seaworthy
Loked at like this, there
could be a whole new dimension
to Hollywood, more noir than noir,
much closer to life than celluloid
and tape could handle.
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