Thanks Bob for kind words and well targeted suggestion. I'll fix that up.
There is another stanza that I think has a few probs as well, I think, but
it seems to work ok overall.
Haven't a clue why I decided to write about evenings, but it is providing an
opportunity for character development, which is a huge pleasure. Sadly, some
of them are terribly boring LOL Oh well.
Cheers and thanks
Frank
> Hi Frank,
> This reads easily and I'm left with a lingering image of the guy...
> As a minor quibble:
> >and the image of a leg
> >to and fro
> >in a vivid red shoe
> - I think it's the foot in the shoe, not the leg!
> And the phrase "low cut voice" - yeh!
> This piece, like lots of your narrative pieces works really well!
> Bob
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