Hi Gary,
Message at the end!
Bob
>From: Gary Blankenship <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New: Grayland Quiet - Bob, grassy
>Date: Sun, 4 May 2003 08:39:55 -0700
>
>I like it... tho
>there's 10 or 11 things mentioned in the list of what was talked through -
>and that's quite a few! And some are more interesting, less common topics,
>than others. So, could one or two be pruned? (I have a feeling that most if
>not all reader's will know that some topics will take a lot of talking to
>get through so the sense of how long people are there for is being
>established by the subject matter mentioned). Whaddya think? Have you
>wondered that in some slight quiet repressable thought yourself at some
>stage?--Bob
>
>Bob, you may be right, though we did discuss all these things and many
>more,
>some more ridiculous. I don't know about the topics though. I've been in
>some long conversations about virtually nothing.
>
Hi Gary,
Yeh, I guess that's one of the differences between art and real life: art
has boundaries, limits, a frame (most of the time). And it's not easy
knowing where the line has to be drawn!
But simply saying this isn't too helpful for the poem itself, I guess... tho
I'd consider retaining the one's where the reader can readily imagine both
sides of a rhetorical/unanswerable lazy debate... sort of say things that
create a soft smile on the reader's face...
Bob
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