I'm sure Melville would be flattered to see a poem about Ahab written in
21st century language, almost two centuries on.
Roger.
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From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, May 03, 2003 11:27 AM
Subject: Re: New sub: Ahab
> Thanks Roger, I'll have a ponder. I'm sure Herman Melville won't mind.
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> bw
> James
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> >From: Roger Collett <[log in to unmask]>
> >Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: [log in to unmask]
> >Subject: Re: New sub: Ahab
> >Date: Sat, 3 May 2003 11:26:09 +0100
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> >James
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> >IMHO if you remove the inversions and the line _geological stones_ you
> >would
> >have a more readable and better balanced poem.
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> >Best W
> >Roger.
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> >
> >----- Original Message -----
> >From: "James Bell" <[log in to unmask]>
> >To: <[log in to unmask]>
> >Sent: Saturday, May 03, 2003 11:18 AM
> >Subject: New sub: Ahab
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> > > No explanations on this piece. See what you think.
> > >
> > > AHAB
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> > > Soon his steady
> > > ivory stride was heard
> > > as to and fro he paced his old rounds
> > > upon planks so familiar to his tread
> > > that they were all over dented -
> > > geological stones
> > > with the peculiar mark of his walk.
> > >
> > > Did you fixedly gaze too
> > > upon that ribbed and dented brow?
> > > There also
> > > you would see still strange footprints -
> > > the footprints of his own unsleeping
> > > ever pacing thought.
> > >
> > >
> > > bw
> > > James
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