Sally,

Lovely word, "assonates". Must pop it into everyday speech when least
expected. Or perhaps, "You're such an assonator!" to people that I know well
enough. When I pronounce "again" it assonates with "desk". It took me a
while to work this out.

Last time I was on Eigg I wrote a few poems (and subbed one here a while
back). I mention this because it was written in circumstances as rough as
the poem of yours which we haven't seen yet. I had my back to a dry stone
dyke, curved by chance like the back of a sofa, facing out to sea from Lagg
Bay, with pen and paper to hand, and just when I needed it a wind blown
slate from Lagg cottage to use as a clip board. Subsequently I wrote a poem
about writing the poem, once home and looking back. The view from Lagg is of
the island of Rhum as you may know (its best profile). In the poem I have
just subbed, Gravity I pretty much had Rhum in mind (though there are no
voles or kestrels).


Colin


----- Original Message -----
From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
To: <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Thursday, May 01, 2003 8:33 AM
Subject: Re: back in the game - Colin


> in fact, 'home again' assonates with 'motorway' when you come to think of
> it. We even say 'motorway' witout stressing the 'ay' sound too much.
>
> bw
> SallyE
>
> on 30/4/03 11:40 pm, Sally Evans at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
> > Hi Colin, yes I meant again to "rhyme" with motorway. I prefer "at my
back
> > door" to "at my desk" because a point I was making was that Skye may be
a
> > wonderful place but ones own back door is more desirable ("home is
best"!) I
> > didnt think of being locked out, or indeed of not having paper or pencil
on
> > Skye. I also meant that things hit you later. Of course it's a very
small
> > thought but it sat in my notebook for a while not looking as though it
was
> > going to get any longer, so there it is!
> > bw
> > SallyE
> >
> > on 30/4/03 6:32 pm, Colin dewar at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> >
> >> Sally,
> >>
> >> Not sure about whether a half-rhyme is intended between "way" and
"again".
> >> If again is pronounced to rhyme with "rain" then it fits but if to
rhyme
> >> with "then" it's another matter. Could be that none is intended.
Punctuation
> >> looks fine to me. I'm just a foetus when it comes to titles but any is
> >> better than none (almost). How about: "Oversight" or "Gestation" or
> >> "Locked-out" or "Impromptu" or "The Return"? Having made a few trips to
the
> >> hills myself I'm familiar with not having pen and paper to hand when I
most
> >> need them. How about "I wrote it at my desk" for L3? Motorway writing
makes
> >> me travel sick just thinking about it. The back door is for the
locked-out
> >> and really shows dedication, if under such circumstances writing is
still
> >> the most important thing. This poem makes me want to read the actual
poem
> >> about Skye, which I have often visited or seen from afar........ in
light
> >> and shadow, weightless as changing thought.
> >>
> >> BW
> >>
> >> Colin
> >>
> >>
> >> ----- Original Message -----
> >> From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
> >> To: <[log in to unmask]>
> >> Sent: Tuesday, April 29, 2003 5:23 AM
> >> Subject: SallyE back in the game
> >>
> >>
> >>> New Poem
> >>>
> >>> I didn't write a poem on Skye
> >>> or on the motorway.
> >>> I wrote it at my back door
> >>> when I came home again.
> >>>
> >>>
> >>>
> >>> comments, objections to punctuation and perhaps a title?
> >>> SallyE
> >>>
>