in fact, 'home again' assonates with 'motorway' when you come to think of
it. We even say 'motorway' witout stressing the 'ay' sound too much.
bw
SallyE
on 30/4/03 11:40 pm, Sally Evans at [log in to unmask] wrote:
> Hi Colin, yes I meant again to "rhyme" with motorway. I prefer "at my back
> door" to "at my desk" because a point I was making was that Skye may be a
> wonderful place but ones own back door is more desirable ("home is best"!) I
> didnt think of being locked out, or indeed of not having paper or pencil on
> Skye. I also meant that things hit you later. Of course it's a very small
> thought but it sat in my notebook for a while not looking as though it was
> going to get any longer, so there it is!
> bw
> SallyE
>
> on 30/4/03 6:32 pm, Colin dewar at [log in to unmask] wrote:
>
>> Sally,
>>
>> Not sure about whether a half-rhyme is intended between "way" and "again".
>> If again is pronounced to rhyme with "rain" then it fits but if to rhyme
>> with "then" it's another matter. Could be that none is intended. Punctuation
>> looks fine to me. I'm just a foetus when it comes to titles but any is
>> better than none (almost). How about: "Oversight" or "Gestation" or
>> "Locked-out" or "Impromptu" or "The Return"? Having made a few trips to the
>> hills myself I'm familiar with not having pen and paper to hand when I most
>> need them. How about "I wrote it at my desk" for L3? Motorway writing makes
>> me travel sick just thinking about it. The back door is for the locked-out
>> and really shows dedication, if under such circumstances writing is still
>> the most important thing. This poem makes me want to read the actual poem
>> about Skye, which I have often visited or seen from afar........ in light
>> and shadow, weightless as changing thought.
>>
>> BW
>>
>> Colin
>>
>>
>> ----- Original Message -----
>> From: "Sally Evans" <[log in to unmask]>
>> To: <[log in to unmask]>
>> Sent: Tuesday, April 29, 2003 5:23 AM
>> Subject: SallyE back in the game
>>
>>
>>> New Poem
>>>
>>> I didn't write a poem on Skye
>>> or on the motorway.
>>> I wrote it at my back door
>>> when I came home again.
>>>
>>>
>>>
>>> comments, objections to punctuation and perhaps a title?
>>> SallyE
>>>
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