Dear Mike,
This is interesting as far as it goes, but it felt like a beginning rather
than a complete poem. This may be my problem, and not the poem's.
One nit I noticed was in the final stanza:
He knew the curve of its eye socket and jaw,
like the signs on a shaman´s fetish.
I think it reads more smoothly if you have 'curves' to equate with the
'signs.'
Kind regards,
grasshopper
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From: "Mike Horwood" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Friday, January 10, 2003 1:01 PM
Subject: [THE-WORKS] New sub: The pursuit of signs
The Pursuit of Signs
These things he knew;
the wind´s bite on his face coming over the frozen lake,
the perfect impression of feathers in snow
where tiny footprints terminated.
Elsewhere would be tufts of fur, the ruin of a skull
bleached white as salt, as brittle as ice.
Mike
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