Thanks Bob,
Both for liking the poem and offering some excellent suggetions to push it
that bit further on the eroticism front.I'll be having a look at this.



bw
James





>From: Bob Cooper <[log in to unmask]>
>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>To: [log in to unmask]
>Subject: Re: New sub: Note Left On The Kitchen Table
>Date: Sun, 27 Apr 2003 13:24:26 +0000
>
>Hi James,
>Yeh, the eroticism of those plums!!!
>I love that poem: it's shape, it's way of presenting things, the whole
>unforgettable magic of seeing it there on the page! And this one's got its
>canninesses too!
>I wondered, tho, about the word "food" - I wanted another more specific
>word!
>And the word "consumed" sounds too unerotic. Swallowed, chewed, gulped,
>savoured, and such words sound far better in my ear.
>I daren't go back into the kitchen after reading this!!!
>Bob
>
>
>
>
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>
>>From: James Bell <[log in to unmask]>
>>Reply-To: The Pennine Poetry Works <[log in to unmask]>
>>To: [log in to unmask]
>>Subject: New sub: Note Left On The Kitchen Table
>>Date: Sat, 26 Apr 2003 09:43:38 +0000
>>
>>Hi All,
>>Just back from my wanderings in Brittany. This was written there, funnily
>>enough. If there are echoes of William Carlos Williams detected then the
>>assumption is correct.
>>
>>NOTE LEFT ON THE KITCHEN TABLE
>>
>>There's crumpet dressed
>>in black fishnet stockings
>>and crimsn silk basques
>>in the bread bin.
>>
>>A tart is hiding out
>>in the cupboard, expectant
>>with the other food,
>>abundant with fruit
>>
>>and laced with a sticky compot.
>>All aaits your teeth,
>>your salivating lips.
>>Take your pick.
>>
>>Either will be ready
>>for you on the table,
>>to be consumed there
>>or elsewhere, at home, tonight.
>>
>>
>>
>>bw
>>James
>>
>>
>>
>>
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