Hi Ryfkah,
I love the rhythm of the first stanza (I keep saying the words over and over
to myself) - the other stanzas work in the same way too - but I just love
the way of the sound!
I'm not yet sure - a lot later in the piece - if I can go along with the
word "exudes" - but I'm enjoying imagining what may happen after the poem
has ended!
As another thought... if the first stanza were in the past tense would that
not, ever so subtly, put the reader more into the present moment of the
poem?
Bob
>From: Ryfkah * <[log in to unmask]>
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>Subject: New: The Caller
>Date: Sun, 27 Apr 2003 20:35:53 EDT
>
>“We stand poised at the threshold of a spiritual revolution, a world
>filled
>with Divine knowledge, the time of Moshiach. A single good deed on your
>part
>can transform the world.” Rabbi Manachem M. Schneersohn, the Lubavitcher
>Rebbe.
>
>The Caller
>
>Still night
>eyes closed
>a dog yips at imagination
>The waning moon overcast
>pitches dim light
>
>I wake to a small man
>like the late Lubavitcher Rebbe
>with a waist white beard
>and black fedora
>His soft blue eyes turn
>He beckons with his hand
>follow me
>
>I address my spirit guide
>who knows nothing
>appeal to my guardian angel
>for some information
>a shrug for reply
>
>The gray morning
>exudes through the window
>like a knowing crone
>
>Ryfkah 4/27/03
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