As a "juvenile fantasy poetry", this is nice.
A complex relationship is being worked out
- harsh father and defiant daughter- and indeed
it is a difficult proposition. More often,
father loves his daughter more.
> taught me to say
> that my real mother
> was that pale goblin in the kitchen
> baking my favorite pie
> as it had always done for ten years.
this sounds somewhat prosy,
(that, that, as) lacks internal rhythm.
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