The term workshop implies that this is a place for work. I posted for
constructive comments, not sarcastic remarks. Your rudeness indicates that
you have no interest in providing information that is useful or insightful.
It also indicates that you are plural and have a fantasy about what is
wasting your time. - Deborah
Dear Deborah,
You write:" I like it 'as is', to me, it says what I want it to say - at
least for now."
If you feel so happy with your poem as is, why are you posting it to a
workshopping list?
Why not put it on a website, ot post it off to Pakistan? We post poems here
to get feedback on them, because we are not all as convinced as you are that
our work is perfect as it stands.
If you don't want honest feedback, good or bad, don't post poems here. There
are plenty of other lists where the members simply read each others' poems
and say 'Yours is lovely too.' The Works list isn't like that. We post here
to be made aware of the strengths and weaknesses of our poetry.If that's not
what you want, then you are wasting other members' time when they take the
trouble to comment on your work.
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Deborah Russell" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Saturday, April 26, 2003 9:56 PM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] Delicat pastel/Deb - Colin
> Don't you think it's better to appreciate your personal understanding?
> This poem is the same nature and form of my work published by Moshin
Jaffe,
> Editor of Tapestry, News International. (Pakistan)
> I like it 'as is', to me, it says what I want it to say - at least for
now.
>
> Thanks for commenting.
>
> - Deborah
>
>
>
> Deb
>
> Some great phrases here such as, "perfumed whispers that die in
captivity"
> and "your tongue caresses mine as though eternity exists" but I can't
say
> that I follow all of the poem. I follow it more than not follow it (I
> think).
>
> Colin
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