Colin, it works, though in S1 I see too many connectors.
Marks on the grass
are what I notice first at the new place, (I wonder if reversed: I first
notice marks on the grass -/garden toys the children took when they went
away? --- perhaps as a question?0
from garden toys perhaps that children had
and took with them when they went away,
the cat flap on the door with scratches next, (then: Next the scratched cat
flap)
then picture children, playing with the cat, (this then should also be
written out)
with other clues, both in and out
reach conclusions
about how they lived,
using for instance
the nibbled flowers in the border,
the faint runs in the grass
to envisage rabbits
even the cat had not caught.
Thanks.
Gary
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