No...after reading it again, it seems clear. Thanks for addressing my
comment. - Deborah
> I believe you are referring to the gunpowder plant and manufacture of
> dynamite, but also the fairly recent incident with John? Deborah
Hello Deborah! I am indeed referring to the plant, though not to
anything more recent. Does the poem require additional differentiation,
do you think?
Thanks for looking in, all!
Carl
==== Revision II =====
The Longwood Story
My father, killed, and I my father's son,
a Brandywine du Pont, began to set
my life upon that store: a future won
by work and trade. A garden fountain jet
released a spire of joyful plans: Nemours,
our early roots, afforded subtle sight:
a thrusting flush of spring. Dirt and manure
are cheerful mire! We catch electric light
in lustrous sprays and frogs in lily pools;
we prune the pine and bonsai. Hothouse ferns
lend depth to shallow blackened mirrors; schools
of fish and floriculture give returns
on my initial buy of Pierce's Park,
established now as Pennsylvania ark.
Longwood: gardens in Pennsylvania, USA.
Brandywine: in SE Pennsylvania.
Nemours: 75 km S-SE of Paris, France.
=====previous revision=====
The Longwood Story
My father killed, and I my father's son,
a Brandywine du Pont, began to set
my life upon that store: a future won
by work and trade. A garden fountain jet
released a spire of joyful plans: Nemours,
our early roots, afforded subtle sight:
propelled and arcing spring. Dirt and manure
are cheerful mire! We catch electric light
in lustrous sprays and frogs in lily pools;
we prune the pine and bonsai. Hothouse ferns
lend depth to shallow blackened mirrors; schools
of fish and floriculture give returns
on my initial buy of Pierce's Park,
established now as Pennsylvania ark.
======original=========
The Longwood Story
My father killed, and I his eldest son,
a Brandywine du Pont, began to map
my way within that name: a future won
by work and trade. A garden sculpture tap
released a spire of joyful plans: Nemours
a subtle marvel to behold: the might
of shooting, reaching water. Dirt, manure
are cheerful mire! We'll catch electric light
in lustrous leaping sprays and tumbling pools,
and stroll through cacti, boxwood, hothouse ferns
and vines in shallow blackened mirrors. Schools
of fish and floriculture give returns
on my initial buy of Pierce's Park,
established now as Pennsylvania ark.
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