Dear Carl,
I appreciate your comments. I have accordingly tried a few
modifications.
Bombay (MUmbai), Calcutta (Kolkata), Madras (Chennai), and New Delhi are
called Metros in India.
The scene is from a beach in Mumbai - Chaupati.
Reclamation drive is "is a project to reclaim the beach for personal
(and public) enjoyment purposes"; yes. Leads to ecological degradation.
The destitute - a good suggestion.
The lady is disgusted with overall ecological, moral, and aesthetic
decline.
In fact, I am pleased that you have picked up the essence of what I
tried to communicate.
css
Changing Times
The sand was dirty, dry and brown
as the sea had backed away
in fear of 'reclamation drive'.
the destitute, gays, dogs and vendors
greedily occupied the stretch between
upcoming apartments and receding waves.
Such places are conducive to the business.
A lady, new to the metro, strolled
with her man, hand in hand,
unaware of fishy smell the wind carried,
or the piece of fish a kite dropped.
A little girl, dressed in poverty,
touched our lady's sari -
a gesture for bread or a penny.
The lady withdrew in disgust and uttered:
ahead of the sun, the beach has become
the land of setting civilization.
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Carl Reimann wrote:
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> Hello CS! Here are some thoughts about your poem.
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> In some sense sand is always dirty, dry, and brown.
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