In a message dated 04.21.03 1:37:32 PM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< framed in the light
a pair of long ears
alert to whatever swoops or stalks,
legs ready to run,
and wide eyes,
aware now of this frail creature
staring inquisitively in. >>
I like rabbits. I have a rabbit hutch. I think these end lines work well; I
can see her looking in. The beginning is kind of slow for me – do you need
all the details posed?
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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