In a message dated 04.21.03 5:43:02 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
<< especially since he died, I've thought about it a lot
and wished that
sometimes
I'd bought a six-pack, or a bottle of scotch,
and at least offered it to him. >>
I like the nostalgia here – very archetypal. I would like to see more
feeling in the poem. I also find some of your line-breaks interesting
choices. I like the subject matter which is ordinary but speaks of more
important underlying thoughts.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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