Liked this; a soft reeling feel. A good rhythm and sound.
Only problem is 'ragged' appears a bit forced.
c s shah
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> LaPoetessa wrote:
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> When winding bobbins on the loom she tends -
> her head a mass of curls all neatly ragged -
> she finds a thread that's loose in cloth - then mends.
> While fingers deftly weave the thread that snagged,
> young Jenny bends to take her food from bags,
> and sees a mouse asleep in cotton bales.
> 'He's dead to all the world', she thinks, then swags
> at James, who stops to see the mouse, and pales.
> Soft laughter reels the cotton, looms are spinning tales.
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