Dear Gary,
You write:'I prefer the last two lines to wrap up with each rhymed. I like
the abba
cddc rhyme scheme in the beginning, and wish the poem ended with effe gg vs
efg efg.'
I like the way a closing couplet rounds off a sonnet, too, but if this poem
followed a different rhyme-scheme, it wouldn't be a Petrarchan sonnet ,would
it?
Kind regards,
grasshopper
----- Original Message -----
From: "Gary Blankenship" <[log in to unmask]>
Sent: Sunday, April 20, 2003 3:53 PM
Subject: Re: [THE-WORKS] Songs of Love - Petrarchan Sonnet
Mary, thoughts:
of fit? In tempered pattern's cut and thrust,
like pitchers placed where swords and daggers rust,
in life it can be so, for words can freeze.
**pitchers puzzles me. An image I do not understand.
In songs of love we write in rhyme to sway
the heart. If sung in time, for words are songs
of love as Muses too have loves to hold.
**The above seems a bit ordinary, almost cliché to me.
We think it game to scoff at other's ways
and yet in time they will forgive our wrongs,
as Zephyrs blow and speak in words untold.
**I prefer the last two lines to wrap up with each rhymed. I like the abba
cddc rhyme scheme in the beginning, and wish the poem ended with effe gg vs
efg efg.
Good luck.
Gary
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