In a message dated 04.19.03 8:22:32 AM, [log in to unmask] writes:
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The sand was dirty, dry and brown
as the sea had receded away >>
I wonder if you could edit.
For instance:
The sand dirty, dry and brown
the sea receded away
This is a strong ending:
Ahead of the sun, the place shows
signs of setting of a civilization.
kol tuv, Ryfkah
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